1.) SETTINGS
The story played in summer at the beach ,at the beach's shore and in the sea. It also played at a place called villa where Jerry and his mother were living.
2.)PLOT
Jerry, a young English boy, and his mother are vacationing at a beach they have come to many times past years as said in "Through the tunnel" by Dorris Lessing. On their second day at the beach, Jerry asked his mother for permission to go and have a look at some rocks. The mother agreed since she doesn't want the son to feel overprotected, and the boy went to this wild-looking place. The boy was good at swimming and was enjoying himself before he went to a small cape where he met some native-boys that were running, naked, down to the rocks. The boys started diving and soon gave Jerry a turn to dive, although they can't understand Jerry's language, they were so kind to him. Soon the biggest of the boys shot down into the water and all of them stood about watching and after waiting for a long time, the boy came up on the other side of a big dark rock. Jerry was so curiuos about what he saw and decided to give it a try, so he demanded to have swimming goggles with which he had discovered that the was a tunnel through which the biggest of the boys swam. After all the hours he had been underwater studying the tunnel thoroughly, that night, his nose bled badly. That day and the next, Jerry exercised his lungs to be able to cope without breathing for such a very long time that he will spend underwater. Two days before they were to leave to the beach, Jerry's nose bled so badly again and he turned dizzy and he almost gave up. When it was the right day to swim through the tunnel, Jerry was trembling with horror at that long tunnel under the rocks. He then dived in the water and started counting and swimming as fast as he could. After such a long-dangerous time underwater, he finally made it through and was again at the surface. Jerry swam to shore and climbed slowly up the path to the villa and lie down.
7 points
ReplyDeleteAll work done.
Two spelling errors.
Too long sentences for the plot.
One unrelavant answer.
i would say,8 points.
ReplyDeletereally well written but you were not sure who the main character was.